10/4/07

 

i always knew that there was something strange about his sister. The way she was always kept locked into her room. The only time she ever came out was to eat or use the bathroom. when i came over to his house i would stare at the door hours at a time waiting for something to happen. Not know of the next opportunity to see her. But today was the day Jacob and i built up our courage and went inside his sisters cave. We had always wondered what was in there. Maybe there was some monster that would come out of the deep depths of her bed and play with her. But Janet didn't play any more. She was fifteen and as she had told us many times that “Playing isn't fun any more. Playing is for babies.” after we had begged and begged for he to come out and play galactic alien invaders with us. But now after so long we were in and we were going to find out. We slowly opened the door. Inch by inch we kept our eyes close to the opening. Finally the door was open and we could see. There were millions upon millions of posters on her wall. Most of them were animated. We both turned our heads to the bright light shooting out from her desk. I slowly made my way over to the computer monitor. The glowing screen hurt my eyes. There in front of us were the monstrous characters that looked like they were going to eat you. But they stayed hovering in one place.there weapons were loaded and ready to fight. Then upon the many boxes that lay scattered on the floor, i saw a title that was similar to the one on the screen. Then i knew. His sister was a computer freak. She spent all her time in her room playing fantasy games rather than being out in the really world. I looked at Jacob. The suddenly the door bursted open and i knew that we were going to be dead.

 

 

10/8/07

"no no no!" shouted timothy. his mother looked around the sstore too fine that everyones eyes were on her and her disobeidient child.

 

"i want to be a pirate!" he shouted again. timothy's mother gave him an aggitated look as she grew tired of his 10 year old tepper.

 

"but honey an elephant is much cuter." his mother tried to persuade him.

 

" i dont want cute i want scary. pirates are scary!" timothy was sick and tired of his mothers halloween costumes. every year he would wear the same old lame comstumes his mother made. his mother has made him wear things from kleenex costumes to a pickle comstuem. once he was a little fire man with a cute little fire truck. but timothy wasnt about to let that happen again. this time he was going to but his own cotsume like a normal person an dhe was going to be scary. and there was no way he was walking out of this store with a stupid elephant costume. he had his eyes se on the swet pirate in he stores window. 

 

 

10/9/07

 

 

"ugh" i said allowed to myself. skool was such a bore today and i was not in the mood to do any more manual labor. i tossed my oversized back pack onto the dirty shagg carpet and through myself onto the bed. then i rolled over onto my back and starred at the celing. then i felt an uncomfortable ping go off in my head. something felt unmistakenabley wrong. something was missing. i got up and scanned my room.everything seemed to be in order or at least i thought everything was until i got to the corner of my room where my desks stands. i gasped at my desk. on it was nothing. absolutly nothing. but until this very moment there was something on that desk something as important as life or death to me something that i could not live with out.

 my lap top.

it was gone and i had no idea where it was or who took  it.and i was so close to go one a screaming rapage around the house until someone gave me a very good explanation as to why it was gone and who took and why they didnt bother to tell me. i walked down stairs to find my little brother and my mother haveing what looked like a very sad converstion.

"where is my lap top?" i demanded. my mother paused for a short second and looked at my brother, who was now starring at his feet.

"what did you do to my lap top jimmy?"i said as i starred at him.

"honey," my mom started out. trying to pick and choose her words carfully, "jimmy had a little accident with your computer."

 

 

10/10/07

 

Magna carata II

 

1.)not enough discription

 

2.)main charactor is old and nostalgic

 

3.)drags on and on and on about one thing

 

4.)setting is the past

 

5.)it starts off with no mystery

 

6.)no good explanations

 

7.)charactor veiws switch from person too person in he chapters

 

8.)books genre is history plot is a girl who is forced to get married

 

9.)realistic fiction has too much drama and makes everything in a drama queen perspective

 

10.)main charactor is too perfect and fake 

 

11.)plot is a complicate spider web of actions that dont make sense and happen at random

 

12.)story is in a moms perpsective

 

13.)i hate high school placed stories about kids with problems

 

14.)kids use drugs/alchohal/smoking/cut themselves/shoot things/are mentally distrbed

 

15.)scifi story is too unbelievable

 

16.)to much explaining

 

 

 

10/11/07

 

 

"hey you" i heard someone shouted. my eyes were very heavy from sleep and were not willing to open. i tried my hardest and they slowly opend half way.

 

"get out of bed or your going to be late!" the voice shouted again. my eyes opened quickly. i jumped and got out if bed. i looked quickley around the room but no one was there.

 

"dont just stand there move!" it screamed. i scared me al ot and they i looked down at my feet to fined my dog just sitting there wagging its tail ever so joyfully. i slowly knelted down and looked it straight in the face, stroking the fur on its head.

 

"for a second i almost thought that you were talking to me,girl. well i guess that means i need a little less cafine." i starred at her a liitle bit longer. then my dog rolled its eyes!

 

"but i was talking to you." said Storm. i starred in shock. ok i really need to drink less cafine.

 

"what ! but how?"

 

"i dont know dont ask me but dont you judt think that its so kool?" she said again. "i just have so many questions to ask! like, for instance, why you guys dont like i when we drink out of that big white dome thing. i mean the stuff in there tastes pretty good!" ok this was getting really weird.

 

"um, uh, storm i am going to go get dressed now." then iwalked away. she didnt shut up for weeks.

 

 

to be coninued.

 

 

10/15/07

 

 

when someone reads my novel i want the to feel hypnotized, stuck and glued to very word and hooked onto every moment in my story. almost spellbounded. like they are trully in that story and that they belong. there. i want them to remember my characters and to think of them as if they are real. like the moment they read there name, and heard my charactors story it gave life to my creations. i want my story to affect my reader in a ssupernatural way. i want them to hear more than just the words that i have written down. like they were actually there and that they could hear the sounds and smell the  smells.

 

 10/15/07

 

a scene i would describe in my novel would be there home in space. it would be difficult to describe beacuse i must create a believeable enviromnent that people could live in, in outer space. nothing to fancy but nothing that is too hard to imagine floating around in the cosmos. i am thinking about how why did they endup living in space which is alo tricky because..... wait... i am going to stop myself now before i get too off subject. ok back to the scene. i need to add in some earthy plants and stuff because we cant really live with out them cause of the air issue. but it needs to be in a controlled enironment because i cant have plants in space just in a place that is in space because plants cannot survive in space. so i need to work in that. i also need a way to have buildings in space to cause they need some structue to be on other wise they are just floating sky scrappers and the people inside them wont be too happy. it would be kinda rough not living on earht cause of the water and metal issue.......wait...sory i am doing it again. well this is all i got.

 

 

10/22/07

 

the book is eclipse.

 

plot summary:

 

bella is in lvoe with edward but when he had left her she had slowly fallen in love with her friend, jacob. then when her clothes are stolen from her room they find out that there is a huge army of newborn vampires trying to get her. so the vampires and werewolves are forced to jion forces in order to protect bella from harm. then in jacob finds out that bella is going to marry edward and is in deep pain. so he tells bella that in the battle that he is going to let himself be killed and so bella feels bad and kisses him. then she reakizes how much jacobwas right and that she is in love with him. but she knows that she love eddward too. then bella runs off to find edward  and then she and edward are attcked. they fin out that the leader of this newborn army is victoria and edward kills her. his family if done fighting the rest of the newborns  and only one is left and she has given up. then the volturi appear because of the harm that the newborns have cause and found ewdard and bella and kill the last newborn because they make no exceptions and that the newborn is a threat to them.